15.The three pie charts show the production and consumption of tea and where the profit goes around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

15.The three pie charts show the production and consumption of tea and where the profit goes around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for 15.The three pie charts show the production and consumption of tea and where the profit goes around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts display where
is the
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the tea is
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tea
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produced and the top consuming countries
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as
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, as
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well as the
distribuion
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distribution
of its profits.
Overall
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, the country the dominiate country in
tea
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production is South Africa,
while
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the least producer is Vietnam. The biggest consumer of
tea
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is Europe,
whereas
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Japan is the smallest consumer. Most of the
tea
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profits
goes
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go
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to the delivery sector. When it comes to the top countries in producing
tea
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, South Africa comes first with 35% followed by Indonesia and Japan with about 25% of the production. Vietnam comes
at the end
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with only 18% of
tea
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.
Moreover
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, half of the consumed
tea
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is
by
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in
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Europe
and
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, and
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America is next with 35% of
tea
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consumption. The least consumer is Japan with only 5%. 50% of the profits
goes
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go
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to delivery,
while
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one quarter of the other 50% is allocated to retailers. The
remained one
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remaining
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quarter is
devided
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divided
between exporters and
propucers
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producers
with around 10% for each.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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