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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future predictions for 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future predictions for 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about the
Southland
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's main
exports
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 in International
tourism
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, Dairy
products
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 and
Meat
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products
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 in the years 2000 , 2005 and future predictions for 2025. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the percentages of
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's main
exports
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 in international
tourism
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 had the highest figures,
while
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meat
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products
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 in
Southland
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's main export
rates
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 had the lowest. In general, there were noticeable differences among the categories.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2000
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's main
exports
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 in international
tourism
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 recoded the highest proportion at around 8% ,
whereas
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 the
rates
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 of
Southland
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's main export in
meat
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products
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 was significantly lower at 6%. by five years, the proportion of
Southland
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's main
exports
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 in international
tourism
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 increased to 9%. Meanwhile, the figures for
Southland
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's main
exports
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 in International
tourism
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 and Dairy
products
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rates
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also
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 changed from 9% and 10% to 10% and 9.5% between 2005 and 2025. The gap between the percentages of
Southland
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's main
exports
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 in International
tourism
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 and Dairy
products
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 narrowed slightly compared to
meat
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products
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in
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Southland
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's main export
rates
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 experienced a downward trend throughout the period

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words southland, exports, tourism, products, meat, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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