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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The information specified in both
table
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the table
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 and
pie
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the pie
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 chart illustrates the proportion of
allocated
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the allocated
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 budget to the police force for
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a two-years
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two-years
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two-year
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 period. At first glance, it is evident that the highest portion
has been
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was
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 dedicated
for
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to
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National
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the National
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 government in 2018,
opposed
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as opposed
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 to the other sources in 2017, which was the lowest among the others.
An other
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Another
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interseting
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interesting
 point is the amount of
considered salaries
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salaries considered
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to
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for
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 the members
which
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, which
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were increasing
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increased
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 from 69% to 75% over a period. With regard to the table, it can be seen that there has been a steady upward trend among three seperated points of the police spendings for about 2.8m for national state, 12m for the taxes, and only 0.5
m
Use synonyms
 for other sources, respectively, which was totally have increased around 14.6m for one year. Looking at the pie charts, it is crystal clear that in 2018, salaries
has
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have
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 decreased
for
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by
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 6 % over one year,
while
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 there has been the same figure for
bulidings
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buildings
 and transport in both years.
Additionally
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, the
earning
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earnings
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 for technology have increased from 8-14%
ayear
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year
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • police
  • funding
  • government
  • local taxes
  • community services
  • salaries
  • equipment
  • spending
  • total
  • source
  • area
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparing
  • reflects
  • priorities
  • shift
  • information
  • contribution
  • 2017
  • 2018
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