Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both theses views and give your own opinion.

Many
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believe that advertising is significantly successful at pushing us to purchase products and things,
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others argue that
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are no longer obvious to pay attention
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essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion. First and foremost, some individuals say that advertising is hugely successful at making
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buy things. With rising technology, I believe there is a trend in society. Compared to the past, the advertising industry has become more popular and improved. It is the key to introducing new products to society. Nowadays,
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industry is using AI as well. With these new tools and software ,
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have become more attractive.
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people
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tend to buy products by seeing advertisements even if they don't want them.
Commercials
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are a strong influence , and they keep getting attractive and creative.
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, some individuals believe that
commercials
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are so common that no one gives attention to them
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This
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can be true in some cases. To illustrate, most
people
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, including myself, watch online videos,
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as on YouTube, skip advertisements that come up in the middle of the videos
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they are usually. When the same thing comes up, it's becoming annoying and disturbing.Individuals tend to ignore these ads. In conclusion, these two views have merits
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drawbacks. In my opinion, I believe that in the present, the creativity of advertising gets our attention, and sometimes, persuades us to buy things
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we don't even need.

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Task Achievement
Try to provide clearer examples to support your points. This will help strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs have a clear focus and flow logically from one to the next. This will improve the overall structure of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve your use of linking words to show how ideas connect. For example, use words like 'however', 'moreover', and 'in addition'.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion which outline your views.
Task Achievement
Your essay addresses both views, which is good for task response.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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