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The chart gives information about the number of university graduates from 1992 to 2007 in Canada. The number of university graduates can be seen growing gradually from 1992 - 2007.

The chart gives information about the number of university graduates from 1992 to 2007 in Canada. The number of university graduates can be seen growing gradually from 1992 - 2007.
The bar chart illustrates the
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proportion of graduates from Canadian universities from 1992 to 2007,
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 how many of male and female graduates.
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, the number of females was significantly higher than males, were the female number starting at approximately 100K,
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 the male it was around 70 K.
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, over the next 9 years , there was
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noticeable change.
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, the period after 2001, as we can see, was a significant jump for both of them , but the increase in the female line was stronger
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, the male
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 about 95K , and for the female team, they went almost off the peak.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • information
  • number
  • university graduates
  • growing
  • gradually
  • 1992
  • 2007
  • overall increase
  • gradual growth
  • different rates
  • steady rise
  • significant jump
  • certain years
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