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Band 5

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/ flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter explain the reasons for the noise apologise describe what action you will take

Dear Mr. James, Hope you are doing well, I'm writing
this
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 letter to apologise
about
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for
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 the noise
your
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you
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 are hearing from my apartment. As you know, I have three kids
and
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, and
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 all are twins. Even though
me
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apply
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and my wife
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my wife and
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try
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I try
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 to do all
there
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their
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 chores at daylight.
However
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, they still woke up at night
and
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, and
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 they always ask for
Tv
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TV
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and
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, and
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 they watched on high volume.
Moreover
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, my
brother in laws
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brother-in-law
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also
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share
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shares
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apartment
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an apartment
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 with us and works in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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 shift. Since he is going late and coming late from
work
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work,
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 he
do
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does
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 all meal prep and laundry at night. I know
this
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 is very disturbing. I understand
unlike
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, unlike
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 us, everyone needs a sound sleep.
Me
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apply
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and my family
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My family and
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will
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I will
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 take care of
this
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 in future
that
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so that
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 we will keep our
tv
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TV
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vloumes
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volumes
 low
and
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, and
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brother in law
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my brother-in-law
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 will
all
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do all
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 his work in daytime. Hope
this
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 problem will
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be reslove
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reslove
Correct your spelling
resolved
 soon. With warm regards, Shivani

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for typos, like 'your' instead of 'you're'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs for easier reading.
task achievement
Make your apology stronger and more formal for better tone.
task achievement
You expressed the reason for the noise clearly.
task achievement
Your tone is friendly and polite, which is good for a letter to a neighbor.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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