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Writing Samples
Band 1

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disgree with this statement?

There is
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 that investing
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 the future is essential for people,
ecpecially
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especially
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the youngs
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youngs
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.
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 some oppose
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 nation, I personally argue in favour as saving
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 might be beneficial in cases of emergency and others. Some individuals do not usually save
thier
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their
money
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. One of the main
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 is that they prefer to
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thier
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their
 budget
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 some current activities or profitable things.
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, a lot of young people focus on personal development and want to improve
thier
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their
 knowledge and skills which can be
nessessary
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necessary
 in the future.
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, there are advantages
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 spending
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 rather than keeping it.

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task achievement
Your introduction should better present your main argument and briefly outline your points to improve clarity.
coherence
Make sure to develop your ideas fully in each paragraph, providing clear examples or explanations.
coherence
Use connecting words and phrases to clearly link your ideas and make your essay flow better.
task achievement
You have identified a relevant topic and expressed your opinion clearly, showing that you understand the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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