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The chart below shows the price in Euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006.

The chart below shows the price in Euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006.
The provided line graph illustrates
th
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the
 price in
Euros
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 of 800 grams of four kinds of
bread
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 in a European nation between 2001 and 2006.
Overall
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, there
were
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was
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 a significant
increase
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 in four kinds of
bread
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. Except for whole grain
bread
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 was
decrease
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a decrease
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in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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. Regarding wholegrain
bread
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, starting at 0.8
Euros
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 per 800 grams. The
comsumer
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consumer
 of
this
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bread
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 recorded a sharp jump to nearly 1.8
Euros
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 for a
bread
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-
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,
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became
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which became
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 the
top sell
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top-selling
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bread
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 in 2002. After
that
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that,
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 the figure
seen
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saw
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 a significant fall to the
begining
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beginning
 price.
Siminlar
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Similar
 changes but in higher extent, Brown
bread
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seen
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saw
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 a sharp
increase
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 in the
begining
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beginning
 of the
preriod
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period
, after
the
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apply
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,
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apply
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this
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bread
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 recorded a significant
increase
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 to roughly 1.6
Euros
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. Turning to
remaining
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the remaining
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 kinds of
bread
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, White and rye both
start
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started
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 with nearly 0.6
Euros
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 in 2001. But white
bread
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 was more
pupluar
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popular
 and
seen
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saw
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 a
garudate
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gradual
increase
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 to just over 1.2
Euros
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 for 800 grams in 2005. Meanwhile, rye
witness
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witnessed
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 a slight fall before it
seen
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saw
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 a significant
raise
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rise
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 to just over 0.6
Euros
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 in 2005
-
Punctuation problem
,
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became
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becoming
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a
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the
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 most unpopular
bread
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 in the country.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words euros, bread, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Analyze
  • Price trend
  • Period
  • Increase / Decrease in price
  • Compare
  • Starting prices
  • Shift over time
  • Causes
  • Inflation
  • Cost of wheat
  • Consumer demand
  • Price volatility
  • Types of bread
  • Market trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Euros
  • 800 grams
  • European country
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