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The graph below shows the number of people taking part in four different kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005

The graph below shows the number of people taking part in four different kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005
The graph shows how many
people
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 participated in four sports –
basketball
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, tennis, badminton, and rugby – between 1985 and 2005 in a certain region
Overall
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, tennis was the only sport that saw a consistent increase in participation over the 20-year period,
while
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 rugby experienced a significant decline.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 playing
basketball
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 and badminton remained relatively stable throughout the years. At the beginning of the period in 1985, rugby had the highest
number
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 of participants, with about 240
people
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.
However
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, the
number
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 steadily decreased over the years and dropped sharply after 2000, reaching around 50 in 2005.
On the other hand
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, tennis became more popular. It started
at
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with
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 150 participants in 1985 and increased continuously, reaching the highest point of about 220 in 2005.
Basketball
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 remained stable throughout the period, with only slight changes. The
number
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 of
people
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 playing
basketball
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 was between 70 and 80 during the whole time. Badminton
also
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 showed very little change, staying around 60

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, basketball, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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