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The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018.

The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018.
The line graph illustrates the number of weekly hospital
admissions
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 in five hospitals – Fortsmith,
Adlin
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,
Stanton
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, Bardley, and Oxley – over a 14-year
period
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 between 2004 and 2018.
Overall
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, Fortsmith and Bardley experienced an increase in hospital
admissions
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,
while
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 Oxley and
Stanton
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 showed a decrease.
Adlin
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 remained relatively stable, with some minor fluctuations throughout the
period
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.
To begin
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 with, Fortsmith started at around 200
admissions
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 per week in 2004 and showed a steady rise, reaching just above 260 in 2018, making it the hospital with the highest number of
admissions
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 by the end of the
period
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. Bardley followed a similar trend, increasing from around 100 to over 200 between 2004 and 2018, overtaking
Adlin
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 and
Stanton
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 after 2010.
In contrast
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, Oxley had the highest number of weekly
admissions
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 in 2004, at about 240, but
this
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 figure gradually declined to about 120 by 2018.
Stanton
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also
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 saw a drop, going from about 150 to below 140, with some minor ups and downs.
Adlin
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,
on the other hand
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, remained relatively stable, fluctuating slightly between 180 and 200
admissions
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 throughout the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words admissions, adlin, stanton, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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