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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.
The two pie charts compare how
people
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 spent their
money
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 in the
UK
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 between 1971 and 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in 1971,
people
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 spent most of their
money
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for
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on
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food
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2001, most spending
on
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was on
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 cars. There was a major change
of
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in
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 basic needs. It can be seen that in 1971,
food
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 was the most spent-on sector in the
UK
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, which was 44%. Car
hold
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held
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 the second position, which was 22%. After spending on
car
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a car
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,
people
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 like to spend more on petrol and furniture, making up 10% and 9%. Spending on restaurants was 7% and
books
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on books
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 was 6%.
People
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 spend lowest on computers, which
indicate
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indicates
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 that
people
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of
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in
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 the
UK
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had
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have
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 little concern about technology. In 2001, the habits of spending
money
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 were changed in the
UK
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.
People
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 spend most of their
money
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 on
car
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a car
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, which
was
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is
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 43%.
Food
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 was
the
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in the
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 second position, making up 14% of total spending. After spending on
food
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, they liked to spend more
money
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for
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on
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 restaurants, taking up 14%. The computer had
12
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a 12
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% share of the total spending. It is interesting to note that
people
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 spend the same amount of
money
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 on petrol and furniture, which was 8% and
this
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 was the lowest spending of total
money
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 in the
UK
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, money, uk, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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