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The pie chart below show the revenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below show the revenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie chart illustrates the revenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. In
this
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page
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page,
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 I will
Summarise
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summarise
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 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
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, in 2000 the
precntage
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percentage
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 steady from 12 to 25%, for
all
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apply
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the
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industry
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entire industry
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 in
togo
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Togo
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.
While
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 in 2050 the semiconductor
industry
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reach
Wrong verb form
reached
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 the peak from 15% to 126%.
To begin
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 with 2000, the total income
were
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was
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 97$ billion, and the data shows that the soft beverages
industry
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 was 25%,
also
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 it is
likewise
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whith
Correct your spelling
with
 the information services 25%. For the life insurance
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 12%.
whereas
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semiconductor
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the semiconductor
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industry
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similalry
Correct your spelling
similarly
as
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has
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 15%.
Then
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 the soft beverages
industry
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 25%.
On the other hand
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,
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in 2050
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2050
Punctuation problem
2050,
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 the total income
were
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was
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 196$ billion. When it
is
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apply
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comes to the
Correct your spelling
specific
specefic
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specefic,
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 it shows that the semiconductor
industry
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rise
Wrong verb form
rose
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 to 126% from 25%.
While
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 the rest of the
industrys
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industry
 were almost at the same
range
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level
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of
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as
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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