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Band 2.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. ​​Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustrations show urbanisation developments in the Porth Harbour from 2000 to nowadays. Several
transformation
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transformations
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 and
construction
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constructions
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 were
organized
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organised
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 in the area.
West
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The West
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 district
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, that
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that
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which
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 was engaged in both
of
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apply
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fishing and
sailboat
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sailboats
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, experienced a noticeable development
on
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in
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 tourism facilities by turning
fishing
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the fishing
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 boat area
to
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into
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second
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a second
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 Mariana private yachts and expanding space for
shower
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showers
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 and
toilet
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toilets
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. Another
chenged
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changed
 point is
south
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the south
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 west car park accessibility
that
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, that
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 redesigned
in
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by
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 branching from
main
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the main
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 road
instead
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 of the road at first
years
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location
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.
On the other hand
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 North district face has been changed minimally by adding
second
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a second
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 dock
in
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on
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left
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the left
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 side of
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the perevious
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perevious
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previous
 one.
Inregard
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In regard
 to
southern
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the southern
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 area, a new
strucure
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structure
 was built beside the lifeboat building that serves as
cafe
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a cafe
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 & shops.
Secondly
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 castle
which
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, which
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 was located in south
east
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southeast
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 district, has been converted to a hotel
which
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also
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 resulted in
hotel
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the hotel
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 owning private beaches.
To sum
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up
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 labour experienced smart and
resilience
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resilient
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 urban development to be more adapted
with
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to
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tourism
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the tourism
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indusry
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industry
 needs and maintaining fair
economical
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economic
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 growth.

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task achievement
Make sure to include a clear introduction that outlines what the illustrations are showing. A good introduction helps the reader know what to expect.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group similar ideas together in your paragraphs. This will make your writing easier to follow and improve the logical flow of your essay.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention which tourism facilities were added in more detail, rather than just saying 'a noticeable development on tourism facilities.'
task achievement
Ensure that all areas are covered evenly. The North district's minimal changes should also be explained in more detail to give a fuller picture.
task achievement
Your essay covers changes in various districts of the harbour, which shows an understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
You used comparative language to show differences between the past and present, which is effective in summarising the information.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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