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Some people think that e-book are the death of the paper books, while others think that paper books will never disappear. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

The ongoing debate between
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e-book
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e-books
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 will outlive
paper
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books
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existence
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 or
otherwise
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 among readers
are
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is
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 very interesting.
This
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e-book
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e-books
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 and
paper
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existence discourse
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books
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 through different
perspective
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perspectives
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. The advancement of technology brings
lot
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a lot
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 of change in our lives,
as well as
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 in
book
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the book
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 aspect. The
existence
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 of
electronic
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the electronic
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 book or
well
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also
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 known as
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an e-book
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e-book
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e-book,
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 is considered
as live changing
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 invention. Thousands of
books
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 can be easily accessed with only a gadget, anywhere and anytime
through
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, through
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 the library apps provided by the government or any other app.
E-
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books
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 are
also
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 slightly cheaper than physical
books
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, some
of
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e-book
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 providers
also
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 have a monthly subscription system,
such
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 as Gramedia Digital and Scribd
which
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, which
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 is very
costly-effective
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.
Moreover
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,
e-
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books
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 can
also
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considered
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be considered
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 more friendly to the environment. It reduces the amount of
paper
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 to be processed into
paper
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books
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 by replacing
it
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them
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to
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with
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 an electronic format with
pdf
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a PDF
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 or
epub
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EPUB
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 extension. With its simplicity and convenience, the
arise
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rise
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 of ebook popularity is not very surprising. Some readers
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also have
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have also
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been
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migrated from conventional
books
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 to electronic
books
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.
However
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, despite its advantages, it is
also
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 true that
paper
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books
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 will never
be
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disappear from
this
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 world. Even though
e-
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books
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 are very convenient, not all
books
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 can be packed into
electronic
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an electronic
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 format.
Books
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 with certain
characteristic
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characteristics
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 for blind
people
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 with braille characters won't ever be replaced
to
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with
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 an electronic format. Braille
only can
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can only
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 be produced using
papers
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paper
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due to
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 its unique form.
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,
e-
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books
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 are
also
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 not very suitable
to
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for
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 elders. Elderly
people
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 tend to lose their ability
in reading
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to read
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, most of them are nearsighted. Not only that, old
people
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's ability
in operating
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to operate
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gadget
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gadgets
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 is
also
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 very limited. Using
e-reader
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an e-reader
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 to read
e-
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books
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 will be a burden to them.
Paper
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books
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 will always have their market segment despite the surge of
e-
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books
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. They are still very special
from
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to
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 certain
people
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. In conclusion,
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e-book
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e-books
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is
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are
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 very advantageous and suitable in
this
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 4.0
industries
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industry
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, but
it
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they
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won't
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willn't
 ever replace the
existence
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 of
paper
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books
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. With its charm,
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paper
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the paper
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 book will always be eternal and irreplaceable.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly define the main points in your introduction and summarize them in your conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to help your ideas flow better between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Add more examples to support your points, such as specific statistics or studies about e-book and paper book usage.
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Simplify some of your sentences to make your ideas clearer and easier to understand.
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You present both views on the topic clearly, which shows good understanding of the debate.
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Your points about the advantages of e-books are relevant and provide a good balance to the discussion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tactile experience
  • nostalgia
  • tech-savvy
  • portability
  • collectible editions
  • illustrated works
  • consumer preferences
  • digital devices
  • environmentally friendly
  • tactile experience
  • sensory aspects
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