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Band 4.5

you have decide to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter - explain why you want to leave your current job - describe what kind of jobyou are looking for - ask for some help or advice

Dear Jane, How have you been? It's been a little
while
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 since our
last
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 chat. I just wanted to reach
you
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out to give a follow-up. I want to change my current job because I
realized
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realised
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 I do similar tasks which are repetitive and useless.
This
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ineffectivity
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ineffectiveness
 caused me I
decided
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decide
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 to resign from my current software developer role because I
do
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have been doing
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 similar tasks like creating
database
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a database
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 and committing
in
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to
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 GitHub for two years.
This
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 repetition pulls my productivity down
and
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, and
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 I have little improvement in my career. That's why I'm not able to be promoted to higher positions in
coming
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the coming
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 years. I'm currently in the market and looking at
the
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apply
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better jobs
including
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, including
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 more responsibilities and duties
to
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, to
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 become
highly
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a highly
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 qualified developer with different experiences.
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, big team collaboration
which
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apply
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helps to become more talented. Why don't we keep an eye on my resume together? Your brilliant ideas might be helpful to land a new position
and
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 you can
also
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 suggest
me
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to me
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 somewhere you know if hiring a software developer. Best wishes,  Ozguk

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Task Achievement
Try to make clear points for each reason you provided for leaving your job.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea to improve flow.
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Use a more friendly tone in the closing to sound more natural.
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You clearly explained why you want to leave your job.
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You asked for help, which shows you value your friend's support.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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