IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Nowadays there is a rapid increase of rubbish amounts all arounf the world . What are the causes and solutions of this problem .

These days
the
Punctuation problem
, the
show examples
 amount of garbage
existed
Verb problem
apply
show examples
around the globe is rising
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 a high rate.
This
Linking Words
 essay will reveal some reasons behind
this
Linking Words
, and it will
also
Linking Words
 suggest some measures to take in order to tackle
this
Linking Words
 problem. First of all, as welfare and medical improvements are in a better status than
what
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
they used to be in the past centuries, the population of the earth is growing
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 an unprecedented
speed
Check wording
rate
show examples
.
Therefore
Linking Words
, more foods are consumed and, for sure, more trash is produced.
For instance
Linking Words
,
according to
Linking Words
 a reported study, the amount of food people of the world consume has
jumped
Verb problem
apply
show examples
double
Replace the word
doubled
show examples
 since 2000.
Secondly
Linking Words
, these days, companies tend to use a lot of packaging.
This
Linking Words
 is because most of the products we buy come from separate factories. To be more specific,
for example
Linking Words
, it takes products from several factories to make up a simple meal.
However
Linking Words
, one remedy can be larger packages.
For instance
Linking Words
, a family that
deinks
Use the right word
drinks
show examples
 5
liters
Use the right word
litres
show examples
 of milk per week, their need can be accommodated with a 5 litter of milk bottle
instead
Linking Words
 of a
one-litter
Use the right word
one-litre
show examples
 bottle.
Hence
Linking Words
, less plastic is produced.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, education can come in handy in
this
Linking Words
 situation as well. In fact, people
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
show examples
 a tendency to purchase lots of unnecessary stuff. Undoubtedly,
this
Linking Words
 consumption method is wrong and can lead to a world full of garbage.
Media
Correct article usage
The media
show examples
 can
have
Verb problem
play
show examples
 an effective role
to teach
Change preposition
in teaching
show examples
 people about
this
Linking Words
. In conclusion, there are several reasons
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
why rubbish amounts are increasing
Linking Words
such
Punctuation problem
, such
show examples
 as
increase
Correct article usage
an increase
show examples
 in packaging and
over-population
Use the right word
overpopulation
show examples
 of the world, but these problems can be solved with
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
good management and education.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point and supports your overall argument. This will help with clarity.
task achievement
Try to use more examples to support your ideas. Specific examples make your argument stronger.
language use
Check for grammar mistakes and simple word choices to improve your writing quality.
task achievement
You clearly introduced the topic and your essay's purpose in the introduction.
task achievement
You provided some good suggestions for solutions to the problem, which is positive.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: