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There has been a significant role in evolving technology in classrooms and a huge impact on traditional teaching methods. Do you agree? Discuss with examples.

There is a widespread belief that the technology in place where people
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 has a greater effect on traditional teaching
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. Personally, I completely agree with
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 opinion, and I will outline the key reasons for my opinion in the following paragraphs. First of all, I believe students (kids and adolescents) should have a break from smartphones and TV.
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 is because they are using technology almost every day, which increases their ability to
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 to receive information. A
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 published by New York University in 2024 concluded that 88% of people who
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 in a room with technical equipment feel distracted.
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, the best way to improve and produce good students is by teaching them natural way without any technological
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. Another reason why I agree is that the a huge effort in technology equipment
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, the government spends a lot of money on education,
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 not
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 healthcare in
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, especially in primary school. In concl

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conclusion
Make sure you have a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points more effectively.
structure
Your ideas should be more clearly organized. Try to separate each main point into its own paragraph.
examples
Use more specific examples to support your ideas, and make sure they relate directly to technology's impact on teaching methods.
opinion
You have a clear opinion and introduction that sets the stage for your argument.
support
You provide a relevant statistic to support your point about distractions in the classroom.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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