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Complain to the manager of a hotel about service quality.

#manager #hotel #service #quality
Dear Manager, I am a regular customer of your
hotel
 and I always stay at Sahid Zarafshan
Hotel
 when I come to Bukhara. The main reason I chose
this
hotel
 is the quality of service here. But I am complaining to you about some problems in the
hotel
 and I believe you can solve these problems positively. First of all, how slow and chaotic the check-in process was. I waited over 30 minutes to speak to a resource agent and when I
finally
 got to the counter, the agent was distracted and not ready to process my reservation. It left a bad impression that lasted throughout my stay.
Also
, the condition of my room was simply unacceptable. The furniture was worn and unpleasant, the carpets were stained, and the bathroom was not properly cleaned. I understand that hotels can have maintenance issues from time to time, but the lack of attention to detail in my room was just that. I was satisfied with your
hotel
in
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 my previous trips, but the
last
 trip left me a bit disappointed. I do not ask you to compensate for these disappointments, but I ask you to resolve these issues positively. I hope that these problems will be solved positively in my next trips. Best regards, Khurshidbek Umedov
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Consider providing a bit more detail or specific examples to strengthen your points and make your complaints even more compelling.
coherence cohesion
To improve cohesion, use more varied transitional phrases between and within paragraphs to guide the reader smoothly from one point to the next.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument effectively.
task achievement
Most of your main points are well-supported and clearly explained, making your complaints easy to understand.

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