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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT UNIVERSITIES SHOULD ONLY ACCEPT STUDENTS WITH THE HIGHEST MARKS, WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT ALL STUDENTS SHOULD BE GIVEN CHANCE. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION

WHATt DO
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What do
 YOU THINK ABOUT
UNIVERSITIES
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ESSAY
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 I WILL TALK ABOUT SOME
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PEOPLE
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people who
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 BELIEVE THAT
UNIVERSITIES
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 SHOULD ONLY ACCEPT
STUDENTS
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 WITH THE HIGHEST MARKS.
ON THE OTHER HAND
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, OTHERS
PEOPLE
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 BELIEVE THAT ALL
STUDENTS
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 SHOULD BE GIVEN A CHANCE.
THERE ARE MANY TYPE OF
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PEOPLE
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 WHO BELIEVE THAT
UNIVERSITIES
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 SHOULD ONLY ACCEPT
STUDENTS
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 WITH THE HIGHEST DEGREE.
IN ADDITION
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, THEY THINK THAT
STUDENTS
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 WITH LOW MARKS
MUSN`T
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mustn't
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GOING TO
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 THE UNIVERSITY. BECAUSE THEY DIDN'T DESERVE IT.
AN
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A
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EXAMBLE
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, WHEN THE
STUDENTS
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 DIDN'T
MAKE
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DO
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 THEIR BEST IN THE SUBJECT.
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Unfortunately
INFORTUNATELY
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INFORTUNATELY,
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 THEY WILL BE
A
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apply
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LAZZY
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lazy students
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STUDENTS
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. BY THE WAY, I THINK THAT
PEOPLE
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 MAY CHANGE THEIR MENTALITY
INSTEAD
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 OF THINKING THAT THEY CANNOT
DID
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DO
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 IT.
MOREOVER
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, THERE ARE SOME
PEOPLE
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THINK
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who THINK
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 THAT ALL
STUDENTS
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 SHOULD BE GIVEN A CHANCE AT THE
UNIVERSITIES
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.NOT ONLY THAT, BUT
STUDENTS
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 MUST HAVE A CHANCE FOR GOING TO TRY DOING MORE THAN THEIR BEST. SO
PEOPLE
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 SHOULD PUT THAT POINT IN THEIR MIND
BASICALLY
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, BASICALLY
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.
ALSO
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,
STUDENTS
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 MUST THINK THAT UNIVERSITY
ITS
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IS
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 NOT LIKE
THE
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HIGH SCHOOL.
ITS
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IT'S
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 PERFECTLY
DEFERENT
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DIFFERENT
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. SO THEY SHOULD DO THEIR BEST LIKE
EXTREMLY
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EXTREMELY
.
ON
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IN
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 MY OPINION, I GUESS THAT
IM AGREE
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I agree
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 WITH
THIS
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 TYPE OF
PEOPLE
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IN ADDITION
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, GIVING ALL
STUDENTS
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PEOPLE
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`S
OPINION
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OPINIONS
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. AND SHARE LOVE AND COOPERATION
TO
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 EACH OTHER.

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Ensure that your opinion is clearly stated and supported throughout the essay.
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You express an opinion on the topic, which is good for task response.
coherence and cohesion
You show awareness of both sides of the argument, which is a good approach.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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