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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph shows the percentage of
GDP
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 spent on health care in different European
countries
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, namely
Austria
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,
France
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,
Germany
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, Switzerland, and the United Kingdom, during the years 2002, 2007, and 2012.
Overall
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, healthcare spending as a part of
GDP
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 increased in all the
countries
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 mentioned over the decade.
France
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 and
Germany
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 consistently spent more on health care,
while
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 the
UK
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 and
Austria
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 spent less during
this
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 time. In 2002,
France
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 and
Germany
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 led with around 10.3% and 10.2% respectively,
while
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Austria
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 and the
UK
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 spent much less, below 8%. Switzerland's spending was in between, at around 9.5%. By 2007, all five
countries
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 had increased their expenditures.
Germany
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 slightly surpassed
France
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, with both around 11%. The
UK
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also
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 saw a significant rise to about 8.5%, closing the gap with the other
countries
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. By 2012, each country was still on the rise.
Germany
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 reached its highest point of just below 11.3% of
GDP
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, followed closely by
France
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 at just over 11%. Both Switzerland and the
UK
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 went above the 9% mark,
while
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Austria
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, though still increasing, was just below 10%. In general, health spending as a percentage of
GDP
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 grew steadily across the five
countries
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 from 2002 to 2012.
France
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 and
Germany
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 consistently spent the most,
while
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Austria
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 consistently spent the least in relation to its
GDP
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, countries, austria, france, germany, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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