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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.
The given graph highlights major information about transporting
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through
 the years , the units are measured in percentages. The graph illustrated that in 2000 the cars
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further
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 more the bus
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had
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 the lowest. With regard to the year
1980
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1980,
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 the train and the bus
were having
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 nearly the same
percent
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 in almost 28
percent
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 , in terms of the car and the tube
were
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being
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 the lowest
users
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.
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Moreover
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 in
1960
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1960,
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 shows
contrast
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a contrast
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 between the transport
users
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,
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 the bus
has
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had
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neraly
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nearly
 38
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percent
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per cent
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,
aftter
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after
 that
comes
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came
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 the
tupe
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tube
in
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 almost 28
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percent
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per cent
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, the train
has
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moderat
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moderate
users
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 in 18
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percent
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per cent
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,
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and lastly
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lastly
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lastly,
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 the cars
has
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had
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per cent
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percentage
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 in about 7%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words users, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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