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he table provides information about underground railway systems in six major cities, including the year they were opened,

he table provides information about underground railway systems in six major cities, including the year they were opened,
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 table provides information about underground railway systems in six major cities, including the
year
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 they were opened, the length of their routes (in
kilometers
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kilometres
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), and the number of
passengers
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 per
year
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 (in millions).
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 the most recent was opened in (2)
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. In terms of annual
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 has the highest number,
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 has both the shortest route and the lowest passenger count. In detail, the London system, opened in
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million
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passengers
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 with a network of (9)
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, and a much higher passenger figure of (10)
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) despite having a shorter route than Paris (
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). The Washington DC metro, opened in
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 riders annually. Kyoto and Los Angeles have the smallest systems. Kyoto has only (17)
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 of track and transports (18)
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 yearly.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, passengers, __________, ________, km, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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