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Some people think that people should use fresh water as much as they need, while others believe that the use of fresh water should be regulated strictly by the government. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In today`s modern era,
people
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 think that anyone can
use
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water
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 as much as they want to
use
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,
while
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 other
people
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 argue that the
ministry
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government
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 should regulate
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use
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the use
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 of pure
water
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. In my opinion, the
government
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 can charge a reasonable amount for the
water
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, so
people
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 will
control
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 their
use
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for
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of
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the
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apply
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water
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, as
waste
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 of
the
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water
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 can be reduced.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 are saying that every person can
use
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 unlimited clean
water
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. If the
government
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 allow
people
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 to
use
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water
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 freely,
than
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then
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 there is a high
chances
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chance
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 of
waste
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 of pure
water
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.
Due to
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this
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,
people
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 should
control
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 the
water
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 pollution , if they
allowed
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are allowed
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 to
use
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water
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 as much as they want to
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apply
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use
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.
Furthermore
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, a person has to collect natural
water
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 from the rain,
after
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and
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 they can
use
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whenever
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it whenever
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 they need.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done at Western Sydney University which says
people
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 who
use
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 unlimited
water
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they
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apply
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waste
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unnessary
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unnecessary
water
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 and create
huge
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a huge
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 amount of
water
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poluution
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pollution
. On the other side, the authority has to regulate the
use
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 of
water
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, so
people
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 can
use
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water
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 as much as they need,
as
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apply
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they
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apply
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can reduce the
waste
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 of
water
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. As
result
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a result
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 of
this
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, the ministry can introduce taxes and charges for
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 supply and
amount
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the amount
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 of
water
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 used,
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this
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which
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 can
assured
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ensure
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 the fair
use
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 of
water
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.
Moreover
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, the
government
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 can charge industries for
exessive
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excessive
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use
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 and
waste
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 of
water
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, so the authorities can monitor
water
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 usage and
contol
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control
 the
polution
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pollution
 of
water
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.
For instance
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, there was an article in the Times of India which mentioned
if
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that if
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 the ministry
charge
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charges
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 bill no
water
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 usage,
than
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then
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people
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 have less chances of the
draught
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drought
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 in the summer time. In conclusion, if
people
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 have no
control
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 over the
use
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 of the
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water
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water,
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than
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then
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 there
is
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are
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 very high chances of
water
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 wastage and pollution
,
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;
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 the
government
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 can
control
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use
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the use
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 of the
water
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. In my view, the
government
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 should apply taxes and bills
,
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apply
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 so
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people
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that people
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 will reduce their
use
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 of
water
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure every paragraph clearly relates to the main topic.
task achievement
Use clearer examples to support your points.
language
Check your spelling and grammar, as this can affect your score.
task achievement
You presented both views on water use well.
task achievement
Your opinion is clear in the essay.
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