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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Make compate in' where ven bv saleting and reporting the main features, and

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Make compate in' where ven bv saleting and reporting the main features, and
The line chart provides key information about the consumption of chicken,
lamb
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 ,beef , and fish in European
country
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countries
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 from 2979 to 2004. The units are measured in
grams
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 per person per week.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the consumption of fish remained relatively stable throughout the period.
In addition
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, the
lamb
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 sector
showes
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shows
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a declined
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declined
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 gradually,
whereas
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chicken
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the chicken
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 section
experienced
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experiences
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 an increase
slowly
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apply
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the usage of beef reached its peak around 1980 in consumption
more
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, more
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 than 230
grams
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, after that it decreased significantly to
becoming
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apply
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almost 130
grams
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in
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by
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 the end of the period.
the
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The
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 chicken was
in
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at
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 the same rate
of
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as
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 the
lamb
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 in the
begining
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beginning
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, in
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in
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at
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 150
grams
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then
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, then
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grow
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grew
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 gradually until
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it becomed
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becomed
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became
 250
grams
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. In terms of
lamb
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, it dropped more than 100% from 150 to 70
grams
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.
the
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The
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 change of fish was stable, it started at approximately 60
grams
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 in 1979 and
does
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did
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notmore
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not
 than 10
gram
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grams
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 all
the
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any
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 time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words lamb, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • anomaly
  • popularity
  • compared to
  • increase
  • decrease
  • overall
  • specific
  • notable
  • unexpected
  • observed
  • health concerns
  • economic factors
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