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The map show the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map show the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map depicts two potential locations for a new restaurant in Paris.
It is clear that
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 one of the locations is
at
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in
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 north
west
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north-west
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 of Paris and the other is
at
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in
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 south
east
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south-east
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 of the town, next to the Eiffel Tower.
Begging
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Beginning
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 with
the
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apply
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Location
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 1, it stands at the north next to a park, which is smaller than the park in
south
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the south
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. Above it, there is a museum called the Maritime Museum. The vicinity of
this
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location
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 is crowded,
due to
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 the fact that the museum next to it gets 8000 visits daily. As it is located
at
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west, it
is benefited
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benefits
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with
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from
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 the view of the two bridges of the town, Bir Hakeim Bridge and Lena Bridge. Taking the other
location
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 into consideration, it is situated
at
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in
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south
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the south
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 near
to
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apply
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the Eiffel Tower, which is the most visited monument in
this
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 town. At the left of
this
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location
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, there is an Art Gallery and it
also
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 has access to the River
Seins
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Seine
.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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