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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables illustrate
,
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apply
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 details of
sales
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 of
brand
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the brand
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 called
fairtrade
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Fairtrade
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 in 1999 and 2004.
Coffe
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Coffee
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 and banana are the two products they sell under their brand
lable
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label
.
Overall
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, there was
clear
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a clear
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 difference in
sales
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 from 1999 to 2004. They
trading
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are trading
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 their products in five different
europian
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European
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 countries (
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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,
swizerland
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Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden).
unites
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units
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 are
mesured
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measured
 in euros.
Firstly
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, in
1999
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1999,
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 coffee had only 1.5 million
sales
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and in 2004, it
shows
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showed
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dramatic
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a dramatic
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 rise to 20
m
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million
.
According to
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 the details given,
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 had the highest
sales
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for
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of
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 coffee. Meanwhile, Denmark and Sweden gained only 0.2m over the
5 year
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5-year
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 period, which was 1.8m and 0.8m to 3m and 1m
respectively
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, respectively
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. Switzerland managed to double the
sales
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 from 3
m
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million
 to 6
m
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million
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while
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,
Belgium
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while Belgium
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 went from 1 million to 1.7 million.
Furthermore
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, Switzerland recorded
highest
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the highest
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sales
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 for
banana
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bananas
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 with 47m in 2004. Sweden and Denmark
sales
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 went down in 2004 than
it
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they
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 did in
1999
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1999,
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 from 1.8m and 2m to 1m and 0.8m
respectively
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, respectively
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.
However
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,
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 and Belgium
manged
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managed
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 to gain
sales
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, m with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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