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In many cities, the population is encouraged to use public transportation rather than private transport In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport?

According to
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 the United Kingdom’s central office, 90% of
people
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 in Europe are now using public
transportation
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instead
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 of
cars
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. Public
transportation
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 systems
such
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 as
buses
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, trains, and subways have become essential for millions of
people
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, especially in large cities.
While
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 public
transportation
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 offers several
advantages
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, including decreasing
cars
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 in the streets
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 and better affordability, it
also
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 comes with some disadvantages,
such
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 as limited
privacy
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 and lack of comfort. There are several
advantages
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 of using public
transportation
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. One primary advantage is reducing the number of
cars
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in
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 the streets.
This
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 leads to many benefits
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 as reducing congestion
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 and decreasing carbon emissions. Using public
transportation
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such
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 as
buses
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, trains, and subways
instead
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 of private
cars
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 will help reduce traffic jams.
For instance
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, public
transportation
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 , like
buses
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, transports tens of
people
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 from one place to another,
while
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 private vehicles often carry only a few
people
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,which increases the number of
cars
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 on the roads.
Additionally
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, public
transportation
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 will reduce the carbon emissions that cause pollution.
This
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 can cause several problems,
such
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 as climate change, or worse, it can cause serious diseases like cancer. Another advantage is the affordability. Using
cars
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 is much more expensive for
people
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,
due to
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 the maintenance, fuel, and parking costs.
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While using
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buses
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, metro, or subway is cheaper than using a private car.
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, the cost of going from New York to Washington , DC is about 70 dollars,
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 it may cost up to 140 dollars by car. Despite the
advantages
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 of using public
transportation
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, there are
also
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 several disadvantages, one of
them
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which
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 is the limited
privacy
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 and comfort.
Buses
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 or metros
usually are
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are usually
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 crowded, so
people
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 will not be as comfortable as they
do
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are
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 in
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private vehicles.
For example
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, in the metro
people
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 sit with strangers
while
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 in their own
cars
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 they will be alone with high
privacy
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.
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, sometimes there are not enough seats in public
transportation
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, so passengers should stand until they arrive at their destination. Another drawback is that public
transportation
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 is not available all the time.Sometimes
people
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 have to wait for a long time at bus stops or at the stations of the trains, so they will be late for their appointments. In summary, using public freightage has several
advantages
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,
such
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 as reducing the number of
cars
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in
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on
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 the roads
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and decreasing carbon emissions. Despite having some drawbacks,
such
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 as limited
privacy
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 and
lack
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a lack
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 of comfort, promoting its use can lead to more sustainable cities and a better quality of life for everyone.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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