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the following maps show the changes that have taken place in the centre of a town since 1700

the following maps show the changes that have taken place in the centre of a town since 1700
The two maps show the significant changes in the city centre from 1700 to
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 day. There are spectacular developments in that
area
Use synonyms
,
such
Linking Words
 as the main road, housing and car parking. The most significant development in the city is the highway widening. The maps show that, in the southwest, Steggle Farm has been replaced by a roadway and streets were expanded. In 1700, there were green areas around the city. In the north, there was Goode Farm, which has now been replaced by a car park and housing areas. In the past, on the east side, there were two houses and stables
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 have been developed into residential buildings. To the north, the green
area
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 was cleared and replaced by stores and residences. In the southeast, a house was knocked down to make way for a new supermarket. The
last
Linking Words
 development is the
area
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 in the middle. The hotel became much bigger than before, and
some
Correct determiner usage
a
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 green
area
Use synonyms
 has been added.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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