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The table shows the number of universities ranked top 200 in the world in three subjects in five countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of universities ranked top 200 in the world in three subjects in five countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the number of higher education
schools
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 which were ranked in the top 200 in three specific subjects in five countries in the year 2011 Looking at the graph from a general perspective , it can be easily noticed that the United States has the most top-ranked universities in three sectors ,
whereas
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 the opposite was true for New Zealand .
In addition
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, most tertiary
schools
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 ranked in the top 200 specialise in
Biology
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. In terms of the USA ,
this
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 nation ranked first among five countries , with the number of top universities which majored in
Biology
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 , Medicine and
Psychology
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 being 69 , 54 , 58 , respectively.
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 , the British came a second , with lower statistics accounting for
Biology
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 (69) , the Medical field ( 24) and
Psychology
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 (29) . Regarding Australia and Canada , the data for both nations was equal, which accounted for 9 top advanced
schools
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 in terms of
biology
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,
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 the former had 13 medical
schools
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 in the top 200 , which was just higher than that of the latter .
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, Australia continued to outnumber Canada , which had 17 top-ranked universities majoring in
psychology
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 ,
while
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 the statistics for Canada were 14 .
Furthermore
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 , the figure for New Zealand was below average , which recorded at
Biology
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 (6) , Medicine (2) and
lastly
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Psychology
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(4)

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, biology, psychology with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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