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Band 2.5

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate, public
park
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looks
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as it looked
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 in the year
when
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apply
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it was first opened (1920) and the current look.
Overall
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, it is visible that there are
few
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a few
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 new
addition
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additions
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 to the place
including
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, including
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, cafe,
children's
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a children's
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 play area and
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an amphitheayer
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amphitheayer
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amphitheatre
 for concerts.
Firstly
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, in
1920
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1920,
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 there was a stage for musicians
in
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on
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 the left side
to
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of
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 the
water
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 fountain
which
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, which
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 was located in the middle of the
garden
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 there were two
entrences
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entrances
 and five seating areas available around the corners of the
park
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. Three rose gardens,
glasshouse
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a glasshouse
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 and
pond
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a pond
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 for
water
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 plants were located inside the
park
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. At present,
old
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the old
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 fountain has been replaced with
new
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a new
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 rose
garden
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 and 4
seat
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seating
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 areas around it.
Stage
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The stage
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 for musicians has been replaced with
amphitheatre
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an amphitheatre
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 for concerts,
while
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 one of the rose
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garden
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gardens
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 has been demolished and removed from the area. Meanwhile,
New
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a New
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 cafe replaced another rose
garden
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.
Previousely
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Previously
, the pond used for
water
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 plants has been removed and replaced with
play
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a play
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 area for the kids.
Moreover
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,
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water
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a water
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 feature replaced
old
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the old
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 glasshouse
and
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, and
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underground
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an underground
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 car
park
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 entrance has been added next to the
water
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 feature.

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coherence
Use clear paragraphs to separate your ideas.
task
Make sure to check your grammar and punctuation for better clarity.
task
You included relevant details from both maps.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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