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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below illustrates
,
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apply
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 survey results of the tea and
coffee
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 buying and drinking patterns in
few
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a few
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 Australian cities (Sydney, Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide and Hobart).
Overall
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, they separate
survey
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the survey
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 into the three
catagories
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categories
, which
includes
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include
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 bought fresh
coffee
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, bought instant
coffee
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 and people who went to
cafe
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a cafe
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 for a drink. Went to a cafe was the most popular thing to do among
four
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of
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the
towns
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four towns
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and
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, and
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bought
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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 was the least popular thing to do in every city.
Firstly
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, Melbourne and Hobart had the highest percentage for
went
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going
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 to a cafe
with
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, with
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the
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almost 65% and Sydney had
little over a
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a little over
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 60% in total for the same category. Brisbane and Adelaide had the percentage of slightly over 55% and nearly 50% respectively.
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,
Bought
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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 was the least popular thing among all the cities. In
Sydney
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Sydney,
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 it was slightly under 45% and in
Melbourne
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Melbourne,
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 it was 42.5% .
Brisbane
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The Brisbane
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 and Adelaide consumer percentage was the same
with
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, with
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 little under 35% . Bought instant
coffee
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 was more popular in
Adelaid
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Adelaide
 than
other
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the other
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 two options with
the
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50% consumers. In all other
cities
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cities,
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 it was the second most popular option for residents.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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