Many people today buy ready-made food rather than spending time cooking. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, more
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choose to buy ready-made foods than cook at home.
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people
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argue that cooking is more economical, I believe that the convenience of ready-made foods outweighs the disadvantages. One major reason for
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trend is the limited time people have in their daily lives. Cooking requires planning, buying ingredients, and preparing
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could cost more than 30 minutes, which most people can't spare.
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commuting from their home to work or a session of gym
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, not everyone possesses the skills to cook or has a daily motivation to do these chores regularly.
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, takeout seems as a better option for them.
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, there are a few concerns related to the hygiene and nutrition in ready-made meals. Since customers can't really observe their kitchen, there's always a high risk of getting food poisoning or allergic reactions. These risks can be caused by contamination
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dirt
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ingredients.
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, it is known that takeout foods are high in salt, carbs, and fats. These three nutrients are often
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as the main source of obesity if consumed
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amounts than
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the average daily intake.
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, many
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believe that takeout food is not safe to consume in
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long term. In conclusion,
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there are disadvantages
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as health risk, I believe that if we carefully choose the restaurant, there will be more benefits in ready-made meals,
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their practicality, especially in today's fast-paced society

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Make sure to clearly state your main idea and support it with specific examples. This will help make your argument stronger and more convincing.
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Try to connect your ideas more smoothly. Use linking words like 'however', 'moreover', and 'for example' to guide the reader through your essay better.
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Spend time on your introduction and conclusion to make sure they clearly summarize your points. This will give your essay a stronger start and finish.
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You present a clear opinion about ready-made foods and provide some reasons for your view.
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Your ideas are relevant and show you understand the topic well.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Time-efficient
  • Ready-made meals
  • Nutritional value
  • Lifestyle demands
  • Work-life balance
  • Fast-paced lifestyle
  • Eco-conscious
  • Sustainable eating
  • Culinary diversity
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Environmental footprint
  • Social interaction
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