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The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main ifeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main ifeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below provides key information about a
bakery
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's average
sales
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 in
London
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 Covent,
London
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 Oxford Circus and
London
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St
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John
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's
Wood
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 in the year 2015. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that a
bakery
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's average
sales
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 in
London
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 Covent had the highest figures,
while
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 a
bakery
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's average
sales
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 in
London
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St
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John
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's
Wood
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 had the lowest. Most categories increased over the period.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2015, the number of transactions in
London
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 Covent Garden recorded an upward trend, rising to 642 .
Similarly
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, the number of transactions in
London
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St
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John
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's
Wood
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 decreased to around 269.
However
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, the number of a
bakery
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's average
sales
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 in
London
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 , Oxford
Circus
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Circus,
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 was higher than
London
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St
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John
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's
Wood
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 at around 269 .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bakery, sales, london, st, john, wood with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average sales
  • branch
  • location
  • performance
  • comparison
  • trends
  • sales figures
  • sales numbers
  • distribution
  • revenue
  • turnover
  • differences
  • similarities
  • sales performance
  • temporal patterns
  • fluctuations
  • highest
  • lowest
  • contributes to
  • unexpected trends
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