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The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.

The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.
The provided figure
demonastrates
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demonstrates
 the variations in
number
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the number
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in
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of
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billion
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billions
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 of
southlands
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Southland's
 main
exportin
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exporting
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2000,20
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in 2000,20
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..
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,
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 and future
projection
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projections
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 for 2025 . 0ver
all
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apply
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,it is clearly evident that
the
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international tourism was the highest in
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2000 and 2025
)
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,
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 and the daily products
was
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were
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 the highest one in 20... .
However
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, the meat
poducts
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products
was
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were
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 the lowest all over the years.
According to
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 what is shown in the bar chart ,
that
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the
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international
tourisim
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tourism
stat
with
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 nearly 8
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billions
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billion
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of
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in
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outcome
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Southland
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 in
southlandsin
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apply
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2000 .
Then
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 it increased
noticably
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noticeably
 in 20
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apply
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 and 2025 to ( 9
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billions
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billion
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 - 10
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billions
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billion
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)
resbectively
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respectively
.
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 the meat products
iullestrated
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illustrated
 a downward
trend
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trend,
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itwas
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it
 began at 6
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billions
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billion
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then
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, then
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 the number decreased to 5.5
approxmately
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approximately
 in 20... the figure
also
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 dropped to 5
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billions
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billion
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.
In contrast
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, the daily
prouducts
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products
was
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were
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 at 7
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billions
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billion
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 in
2000
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2000,
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then
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 rocketed dramatically to reach 10
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billions
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billion
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 in 20
.... ,
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.
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in
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2025
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2025,
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is
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fell to
at
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about 9.5
.
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billion.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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