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Band 2.5

The most important aim of sciences should be to improve peoples lives to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no denying the fact that science
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 a crucial part in our
lives
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.
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 it is
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 held belief that improving
people
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's
lives
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 should be a major priority, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I believe that
scientist
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 should help individuals live a better life.
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 with, many
people
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consuming
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 bad products out of ignorance.
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, eating a lot of processed food with chemical ingredients,
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 as cereal and chips.
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, educating
people
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 about the risks, especially for
kids
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 can improve our
lives
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 and reduce
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consumption.
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, spread awareness by making
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 advertisement to get their attention. Another point to consider, focusing on how to improve
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people
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lies
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 can't help
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 growth
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 economy. It is
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 possible to say that if
people
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 pay more attention to what they are eating, it helps prevent sickness, which means the government can't spend
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 money to develop another important sector,
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 as
supply
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scientist
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 with sources to help us improve. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I strongly believe that
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 should help to improve
individual's
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lives
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 and make it much easier.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly express your opinion in the introduction.
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Provide stronger and more direct examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas in a clearer way, using paragraphs logically.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammar and spelling mistakes, especially verb forms and articles.
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You present a clear personal opinion on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion is present and summarizes your main idea.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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