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the table below shows daily production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004

the table below shows daily production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004
The table illustrates
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many daily
production
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 of
oil
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 in four different countries from 2000 to 2004.
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,
it is clear that
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 Nigeria contributed the highest of
oil
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production
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,
while
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 both Chad and Somalia had similar amounts, with
being
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Chad being
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 the smallest. In 2000, about 275,000
barrels
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had
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production
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produced
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 in Congo, which was over five times higher than Somalia’s
production
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 of 5,000
barrels
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. Followed by Nigeria
production
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 around 205,0000 per day.
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, there was a decrease in
daily
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the daily
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production
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 of
oil
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 in Congo over the years to reach 203,000
barrels
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 in 2004.
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, the figures in Somalia showed
significant
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increased
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 to 50,000 over a four-year period.
Moreover
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, there was a fluctuation in Nigeria, from a fall of 190,000 in 2002,
then
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 rose slightly to 213,000 in 2004.
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,
oil
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production
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 in Chad did not begin until 2003, generating 8,000
barrels
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 per day and sharply increased to 50,000
barrels
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 in 2004.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, oil, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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