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ou recently moved to a new neighborhood. Write a letter to your friend and tell them: Why you moved to the new neighborhood Describe your new neighborhood Invite your friend to visit you soon

Hey Peter, How are you doing? Hope everything goes smoothly as always. I'm writing to you
for letting
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 you know I have moved to Pimpama. You know we have been on Broadbeach for 8 years
but
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 now is
time
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the time
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 to save more money.
The life
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Life
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 in Australia is suffering a lot of inflation impact
and
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, and
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 the rents are insanely crazy expensive. We were paying $1.200 weekly, so it is the main reason that forced
to
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us to
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 change the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 and we are moving to a big house for half
price
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the price
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 that we are currently paying. I
woul
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would
 like to invite
to
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you to
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 visit us. Please come with your kids and wife to enjoy an afternoon with a
barbeque
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barbecue
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on
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in
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 the garden. The weather is beautiful
to spend
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for spending
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 time outside. Let me know when you are available. I can't wait to see you all. Big hug Francy

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coherence cohesion
Try to use clearer paragraphs so that each idea stands out more.
task achievement
Make sure to include all points clearly, like the reason for the visit.
task achievement
You did a nice job of explaining why you moved and inviting your friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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