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The diagram below shows time spent watching TV by age and gender in the UK in 1995 and 1999

The diagram below shows time spent watching TV by age and gender in the UK in 1995 and 1999
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 the information here reveals a lot
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 points. The diagram below shows time spent watching TV by age and gender in the UK in 1995 and 1999 . It is surprising to notice that there is a sharp rise in
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the diagram
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 below . Here , a reader can deduce that there is a similarity between 25 to 34 and 45 to 54 in women . It is clearly seen that there is a fast increase in
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the diagram
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 below as the line shows . And
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 the first to the end .
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 , if we hold a comparison dealing with shows time spent watching TV by age and gender in the uk in 1995 and 1999 , And that to illustrate , the highest in women was in 65 and the lowest in women was in 4 to 15 ,
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 similarity between the man the highest was in 65 but the lowest was in 4 to 15 .

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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