International travel has many advantages to both travelres and countty that they visited. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It cannot be denied that international
touriism
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tourism
has brought many
advatages
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advantages
to
travelers
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and host countries. I believe, despite some drawbacks,
advantages
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the advantages
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outhweigh
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outweigh
the disadvantages. On the one hand, international
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tourism
causes some problems in the host countries,
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as
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pollution, waste disposal, unregulated constructions, damage to historical spots and
nature
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landscapes. So
that
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, many native people
is
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are
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not satisfied
by
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overtourism. In terms of
travelers
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travellers
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, they
faces
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face
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so many problems as well.
Overprice
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and getting scammed are so common in
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a place which is popular and
overhighlited
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overhyped
.
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, international
travel
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brings so many benefits
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country that
visited
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is visited
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by tourists. Each tourist
come
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comes
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with money and new job opportunities
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, in
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in especially
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especially in
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the torism
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torism
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tourism
sector.
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, new souvenir shops, hotels,
travel
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agendas
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and even new cafes. In terms of tourists, international
travel
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presents the opportunity of getting to know new cultures,
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different places, and
exciting
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having exciting
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experiences
to
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them
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.
Needles
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to say that
travel
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brings them new ideas and
extend
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extends
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their
horizions
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horizons
. In conclusion, international
travel
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is beneficial for both
travelers
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travellers
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and host countries. Despite some drawbacks,
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I
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believe
advantages
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the advantages
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overweigh
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outweigh
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the disadvantages.

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Make sure that your introduction clearly states your main idea about the advantages and disadvantages of international travel.
coherence and cohesion
Use more connecting words or phrases to help your ideas flow better from one to the next.
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Try to give more specific examples to support your main points. This will make your arguments stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling to avoid mistakes that can distract from your message.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about the topic that you express in both the introduction and conclusion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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