International travel has many advantages to both travelres and countty that they visited. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It cannot be denied that international
touriism
has brought many Correct your spelling
tourism
advatages
to Correct your spelling
advantages
travelers
and host countries. I believe, despite some drawbacks, Use the right word
travellers
advantages
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the advantages
outhweigh
the disadvantages.
On the one hand, international Correct your spelling
outweigh
torism
causes some problems in the host countries, Correct your spelling
tourism
such
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pollution, waste disposal, unregulated constructions, damage to historical spots and Punctuation problem
apply
nature
landscapes. SoReplace the word
natural
that
, many native people Correct determiner usage
apply
is
not satisfied Correct subject-verb agreement
are
by
overtourism. In terms of Change preposition
with
travelers
, they Use the right word
travellers
faces
so many problems as well. Correct subject-verb agreement
face
Overprice
and getting scammed are so common in Replace the word
Overpricing
such
a place which is popular and Linking Words
overhighlited
. Correct your spelling
overhyped
On the other hand
, international Linking Words
travel
brings so many benefits Use synonyms
the
country that Change preposition
to the
visited
by tourists. Each tourist Verb problem
is visited
come
with money and new job opportunities Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
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, in
in especially
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especially in
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the torism
torism
sector. Correct your spelling
tourism
For instance
, new souvenir shops, hotels, Linking Words
travel
Use synonyms
agendas
and even new cafes. In terms of tourists, international Use the right word
agencies
travel
presents the opportunity of getting to know new cultures, Use synonyms
see
different places, and Wrong verb form
seeing
exciting
experiences Verb problem
having exciting
to
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apply
them
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apply
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to say that Use the right word
Needless
travel
brings them new ideas and Use synonyms
extend
their Correct subject-verb agreement
extends
horizions
. In conclusion, international Correct your spelling
horizons
travel
is beneficial for both Use synonyms
travelers
and host countries. Despite some drawbacks, Use the right word
travellers
i
believe Fix capitalization
I
advantages
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the advantages
overweigh
the disadvantages.Verb problem
outweigh
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task achievement
Make sure that your introduction clearly states your main idea about the advantages and disadvantages of international travel.
coherence and cohesion
Use more connecting words or phrases to help your ideas flow better from one to the next.
task achievement
Try to give more specific examples to support your main points. This will make your arguments stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling to avoid mistakes that can distract from your message.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about the topic that you express in both the introduction and conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite