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Writing Samples
Band 3

Is it appropriate for students and teachers to be friends on Facebook? How much do you agree or disagree with this opinion and why? Giver reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowdays
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, social
media
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 plays
crucial
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a crucial
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 role in
everyone
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everyone's
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 lives. It is good
have
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to have
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 friends on
facebook
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Facebook
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but
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, but
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students
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 and teachers as
a
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apply
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friends
has
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have
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prons
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pros
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 and cons
which
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i
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I
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 will discuss in
this
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 essay. First and
foremost
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foremost,
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 if youngsters and
tutor
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tutors
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interacts
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interact
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 on social
media
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 like
facebook
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Facebook
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 can help build a good relationship and make learning enjoyable.
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 interaction can help
learner
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learners
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 feel more comfortable asking questions and sharing ideas.
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,
a
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an
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instrutor
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instructor
 might post helpful study tips or interesting articles that
students
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 find useful. On the other side, having learners and
teacher
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teachers
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 as
a
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apply
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friend
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friends
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 on social
media
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 can blur the
link
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line
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 between personal and professional life. It might make it difficult for
educator
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educators
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 to maintain authority in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
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, if
students
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 see teachers posting personal photos or comments,
if
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it
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 can change how
students
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 view them.
Students
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 may feel pressure to accept the request
for
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from
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 their teacher, fearing it will affect their grade or treatment in the class.
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create
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creates
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 stress on the learners and
affect
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affects
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 their focus on study. In a nutshell, as privacy is very important for
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as well as
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 for teachers so they should not share their personal lives with each other
while
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 using some privacy on their accounts.
Moreover
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, it is better for
students
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 to avoid
this
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 kind of
freindship
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friendship
 on social
media
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 and focus on
study
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studying
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position, whether you agree or disagree, in your introduction. It helps readers understand your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly. This will improve the flow of your essay.
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Provide more examples to support your points. Examples help illustrate your ideas clearly to the reader.
task achievement
You raised important points about the impact of social media on student-teacher relationships, which is relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • friends
  • Facebook
  • relationship
  • learning
  • comfortable
  • questions
  • ideas
  • helpful
  • tips
  • articles
  • authority
  • classroom
  • personal
  • professional
  • privacy
  • concern
  • information
  • conflicts
  • pressure
  • grades
  • treatment
  • stress
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