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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.
The chart illustrates
,
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apply
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 the count of homes by their yearly income in the United States in three different
years
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 (2007,2011 and 2015).
Overall
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,
amount
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the number
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 of families
earned
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that earned
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 between $50,000-$74,999 stayed at the same level at all 3
years
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and
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, and
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 $100,000 or more
category
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 had the most
amount
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number
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 of earners in 2007 and 2015. $75,000-$99,999 recorded the lowest household numbers in all
years
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.
Firstly
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, people
earned
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who earned
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 $100,000 or more was the most popular
category
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 in 2007 and
2015
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2015,
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 with almost 30
million
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 and slightly under 35
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million
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million,
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 respectively
but
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, but
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 in 2011 count was 27.5
million
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.
However
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, $75,000-99,000 was the least popular income
category
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 with almost 15
million
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 in 2007, slightly below 15
million
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 in 2011 and
lastley
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lastly
, 15
million
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 in 2015.
Furthermore
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,
category
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 $50,000-74,000 remained unchanged over the period given. In 2011, $25,000-49,999 salary level reached
the
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apply
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30
million
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and
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, and
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 it was the most popular
category
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 in that year.
Moreover
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, people who earned under $25,000
was
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were
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 25m, almost 30m and 32.5m in
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years
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the years
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 2007,2011 and
2015
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2015,
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 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, category, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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