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Phychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical illnesses or disablities, neverthless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than phychological illnesses or disablities. The letter being regarded as a 'taboo' subject sometimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

there
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 is no denying the fact that mental
health
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 problems are real.
While
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 it is
commonly
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a commonly
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 held belief that psychological
illness
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illnesses
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 are not important, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that mental
health
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 problems are
vital as
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as vital
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much
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as physical illnesses, because
it
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they
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affects
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affect
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people
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's performance.
To begin
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 with, many individuals are not taking mental
health
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 issues seriously.
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, since it is invisible, they consider it like nothing.
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, a lot of
people
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 suffer from psychological illnesses,
I
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and I
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did not deal with it correctly. Which
lead
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leads
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to
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apply
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to losing
self control
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self-control
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.
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, nurses are always under a lot of pressure
,
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;
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 if they
did
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do
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 not deal with it, it can cause severe anxiety or depression. Another point to consider
that
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is that
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people
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 do not
realize
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realise
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 the damage that mental illnesses can cause. It is
also
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 possible to say that
,
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apply
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people
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ending
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 their lives
,
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 because of their late
diagnose
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diagnosis
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.
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, many individuals
feeling
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feel
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 like something
wrong
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is wrong
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 with them,
such
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 as
people
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 with BPD, their untreated attitude,
push
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which pushes
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people
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 away from them.
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, no one wants to live with someone with
unexpected
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an unexpected
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 attitude or
dealing
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deal
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 with a complex personality. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I strongly believe that society should focus more on mental
health
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 problems
,
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 and educating the public about
it
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them
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 to spread awareness.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your viewpoint in the introduction and support it throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use clearer linking words to connect your ideas better throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for better clarity.
Task Achievement
You included some good examples to support your points, showing relevance to the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
You made a strong concluding statement that reaffirms your opinion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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