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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map
lliustrate
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illustrates
 three
propsal
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proposal
 locations for a leisure centre which
inculding opioin
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including Opinion
 A
a
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, a
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factory , B
a
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, a
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bulding
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building
 and C
a
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, a
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fram
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farm
.
Overall
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, a
comparisons
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comparison
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 between three
differnt
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different
centre
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centres
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 shows
singificant chnages
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significant changes
 in the same land.
the
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The
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 first
center
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centre
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 near the river, almost in
th
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the
 right
corner
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corner,
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present
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presents
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 a
bulding
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building
looks
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that looks
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 like
factory
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a factory
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which
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, which
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called
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is called
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A
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A.
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,
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apply
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Moreover
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, C and B
has
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have
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 a
diffent
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different
 type of land.
in
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In
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summay
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summary
,
of
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apply
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this
Linking Words
 map
present
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presents
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 a
diffent
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different
 type of leisure centre with
muitpule
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multiple
 locations.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • space constraints
  • costs
  • prime location
  • secluded
  • natural area
  • serene environment
  • remoteness
  • accessibility
  • transport facilities
  • advantageous
  • undisturbed leisure
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