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Band 3

People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university? Use reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowdays
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, many
people
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 have many opinions about getting high quality education in school or university is essential
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 that
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is becomse
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becomse
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because
 of many reasons. I will explain the main reason in the following paragraphs with examples. First of all,
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 a
value hight
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value-based
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 education will have a smart and creative student
which
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who
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 in the future will be
independet
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independent
 and
grantee
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 the
life
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.
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, advanced schools
foucus
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focus
in create
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a
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intelligence
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student
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students
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 to
helps
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help
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 the country
to development
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develop
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 and
adaptable
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be adaptable
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. A study published in New York University in 2012 concluded that 90% of
people
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 who have
a
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graduated from intelligence school and
Univirsity
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university
 have good
knoledge
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knowledge
 and critical thinking. As
result
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a result
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,
helpping
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helping
 to improve and maintain the country is important and some
people
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 seek to get that chance.
Others
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 opinion, some
people
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 think
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life
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 now is hard
beacuse
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because
life
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 now is expensive
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such
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, such
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 as housing, food and healthcare.
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, the
comptition
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competition
 now is not easy between
each
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indivduals
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individuals
.
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, every generation
smarter
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is smarter
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that
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than
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 the generation before, and the future will be smarter than now.
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, the
indiviual
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individual
 should always
keep seeking
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seek
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 to have
career
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a career
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 in
good
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a good
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 institution and
grantee
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guarantee
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to
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have good and
heathy
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healthy
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life
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 . In conclusion,
their
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there
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 are a lot of
reason
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reasons
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but
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, but
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 below I mention the
keys
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two
reasons
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key reasons
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 why
the
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advanced education
is
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should take a place. to have good
and
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mental
citizen
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citizens
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 and ensure
to
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apply
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have good career and
high
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a high
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 position.

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coherence and cohesion
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Use simple and clear sentences.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to make your points stronger.
coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
You have good points about the importance of education.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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