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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
The following figure
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water
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use
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 worldwide and
water
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 consumption in two different countries.
Overall
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,
Agriculture
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 is the largest
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water consuming
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water-consuming
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 sector.
Due to
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 its larger population and higher demand for
agriculture
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 and industry,
Brazil
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 has higher
water
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 usage than
Democratic
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Republic
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 of
Congo
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. At the beginning, Global
water
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use
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 by sector has been increasing, but the differences are significant.
Furthermore
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Agriculture
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 has the largest growth, with only 500 km³ in 1900 and an increase to 3000 km³ in 2000, showing a significant increase. Industrial
use
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 has steadily grown, reaching about 1000 km³ in 2000, but the growth rate is slower than
agriculture
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.
Besides
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, the growth of domestic
use
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 is the slowest, maintaining the lowest level among the three.
Firstly
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Water
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 consumption in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 in 2000
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 a significant gap.
Moreover
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, in terms of population,
Brazil
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 has 176 million and
Democratic
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the Democratic
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Republic
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 of
Congo
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 has 5.2 million, which is about 34 times the difference between the two.
In addition
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irrigated
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the irrigated
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in
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area in
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Brazil
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 is 26500 km², which is 265 times that of
Democratic
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the Democratic
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Republic
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 of
Congo
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. In terms of
water
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 consumption per person,
Brazil
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 has 359 m³ and
Democratic
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the Democratic
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Republic
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 of
Congo
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 has 8 m³.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, agriculture, brazil, republic, congo with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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