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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people think that sports is very important for society. Others, however, argue that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Nowadays,
according to
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 some
people
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people,
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sports
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is
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 necessary for every resident of society . But many people think it
does
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is
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 not
worthy
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to spend
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 time
in
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globalization
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. I will discuss these concepts
an
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and
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 provide some
fact
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facts
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 with my idea. There are many facts about
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
sports
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 for humans and their bodies. The main reason is that
sports
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is
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are
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 active exercises like
joga
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jogging
, running , playing many games
and
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, and
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 they can improve body health. The second factor is
many
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that many
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 sportsmen
are
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apply
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seem young and pretty
beacuse
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because
 of
thier
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their
body
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apply
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elastic
.
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bodies.
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For example
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, following
sports
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 can provide perfect balance and it
incerese
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increases
 more interest
on
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 everyone .

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state both views in your introduction. Include a conclusion that sums up your opinion and the key points.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas and paragraphs, such as however, therefore, and in addition.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or facts to support your points. For instance, mention how sports can impact mental health or community relationships.
content
You have made a good start by discussing the benefits of sports for health.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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