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You study at a college in the city centre. You use public transport to get to the college but the bus service you use has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In the letter, -Say who you are and the details of service you use -Explain the problem with the bus service -Suggest what you think the manager shoDuld do

Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. My name is Santhosh Kumar, and I am currently studying B.Sc. Mathematics at GNC College. I have been a regular and loyal customer of your transport service since my 10th grade, using the bus service from Central Park to GNC College for my daily commute.
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, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the recent change in the bus
route
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. Until recently, I had no issues with the service, but the recent
route
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 change has caused significant inconvenience. The driver often does not stop at designated bus stops, and at times, he changes the
route
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 without prior notice.
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, his
behavior
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 towards students is aggressive, making the journey unpleasant.
Due to
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 these issues, I have been late to college on several occasions. I kindly request
you
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that you
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to
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address
this
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 matter by ensuring that the driver follows the designated
route
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 and stops at the proper locations.
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, a formal warning regarding his
behavior
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 would be appreciated, as maintaining a professional attitude towards passengers is crucial for customer satisfaction. I look forward to your prompt response on
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 matter. Yours faithfully,

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coherence and cohesion
Try to make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea. This will help readers follow your thoughts better.
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Include more details about how the change affects you personally. This can strengthen your request for action.
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You have used a polite tone throughout your letter, which is appropriate for this type of communication.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easier to read.
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