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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and gie your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that
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 some
professionals
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 would rather
work
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 in different countries from the one where they got their education
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 it is a commonly held belief that
professionals
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 have their right to
work
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 in another
country
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 if they wish. There is
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 an argument that opposes
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 belief,
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 requires
professionals
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 to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they had their training.
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, many people suppose that expert should have their free will in choosing where to
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.
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, they can choose if they want to
work
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 in a different
country
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 or if they are willing to
work
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 in the
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, because nobody should be put in a place where he does not feel the trust and safety.
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, when
professionals
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 are put in a place where they feel happy and safe, they can give 100
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 of their knowledge, power, and
work
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 , which will lead to a great impact on the companies.
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, there were 700 surgeons who graduated from RCSI in Ireland, where all of them were placed in different countries where they actually wanted, and 436 of them
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now have an impressive reputation.
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, several believe the opposite
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professionals
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 should get their job where they got their education from. It is
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 possible to say that these people , from their perspective, believe that
professionals
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 should repay the
country
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 by working in government industries.
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if a doctor graduated from Russia, he should at least
work
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 in a government hospital as a way to thank them and repay them. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that
professionals
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 have their own choice and right to choose where they want to
work
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.

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Check your grammar and spelling for mistakes. Some sentences were unclear or had errors.
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You have a clear introduction that outlines the topic.
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You present both sides of the argument, giving a balanced view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • homegrown expertise
  • return on investment
  • critical sectors
  • global exchange
  • career opportunities
  • international skill gaps
  • cultural understanding
  • diversity
  • balance
  • international exchange programs
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