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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
,
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apply
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 and table illustrate
that
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the
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 details of
water
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 used by
sector
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the sector
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in globe
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globally
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, and the
water
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utilized
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utilised
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 in two varied nations.
Overall
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, it can be seen in
graph
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the graph
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 that the three sectors
agriculture
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, agriculture
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,
industrial
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industry
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, and domestic consumption of
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water
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water,
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raised
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rose to
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at
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a
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 huge level from
start
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the start
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 of the
year
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.
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Water
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The water
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use
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 table shows two countries data of population, irrigated land, and
water
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 consumption per person and Brazil has a massive
use
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 in comparison to
Democratic
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the Democratic
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 Republic of Congo. In the graph, Agriculture had around 500
km
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cube
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 of
water
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use
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 in the
year
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 1900
and
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, and
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 it skyrocketed after and reached 2000
km
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cube
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 in the
year
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 2000. The industrial
use
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 started
nearly
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with nearly
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 100
km
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cube
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use
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apply
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of
water
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 and
remain
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remained
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 constant till the
year
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 1950
and
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, and
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went
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then went
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 up to 2000
km
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cube
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In
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in
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 the
year
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 2000. Similar records
was
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were
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 seen in the domestic
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use
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use,
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started
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starting
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 with 100
km
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 vube and
increased
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increasing
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 nearly
upto
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up to
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 500
km
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cube
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 in the
year
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 2000. In
table
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the table
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, Brazil had
population
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a population
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around
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of around
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 176 million, irrigated land
use
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water
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around
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of around
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 26,500
km
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cube
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and
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, and
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 per person
water
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use
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 was 359
meter
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m
cube
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.
On the contrary
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,
Democratic
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the Democratic
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 Republic of Congo had less
water
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 consumption
in
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per
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population
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capita
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around
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, around
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 5.2 million
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along
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, along
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 with irrigated land was 100
meter
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meters
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apply
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cube
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, and per person was 8
meter
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meters
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apply
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cube
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, year, use, km, cube with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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