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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the public
library
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 nowadays compared with 20 years ago.
Overall
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, there are As presented in the first map, 20 years ago, the
library
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 had three rooms in three corners, which were
CDs
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a CDs
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, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games
room
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 on the top-left,
children's
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a children's
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books
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room
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 on the top-right, and
reading
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a reading
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room
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 on the bottom-left.
Enquiry
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The enquiry
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 desk
were
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was
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 located on the bottom-right corner of the
library
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. The left
side
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 of the
library
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 was where adult fiction
books
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 were located, and the right
side
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 belonged to adult non-fiction
books
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. There were tables and chairs in the
center
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centre
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 between
each
Correct determiner usage
the
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two side
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side
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sides
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. The
library
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 witnesses the dramatic changes. The chairs and tables are removed, and the rooms are changed: children's
books
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 became
lecture
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a lecture
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room
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,
reading
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the reading
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room
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 became
computer
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a computer
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room
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, and
CDs
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the CDs
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, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games
room
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 became children's fiction and
story telling
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storytelling
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 events with some expansion and renovations.
Enquiry
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The enquiry
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 desk is now a new cafe. Adult fiction
books
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 are moved to the right with
information
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the information
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 desk and self-service machines. The left
side
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are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 now for all
referent
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relevant
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books
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, books, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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